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The sun doesn't go to sleep
And so won't I
Defy the clock of the sky
Following only my grasshopper mind
I don't see
I'm already put down by defeat
It's already dawn
Listen to the madman's laugh
Laughing out so loud and hard
Just look at the sky
It's grey with clouds yet so bright
Why should I go to sleep?
What's the use?
Need to get up for work soon
Common sense, oh, where are you?
You're always so fast to leave
Why won't you stay just a little longer?
Just a bit and it will all be good
Yet my will is to deplete
I can try and refuse
Eventually I'll give in to the lure
I'd need a reboot
First I need to find you
You like to avoid me, don't you?
I'm getting slower
You're getting stronger
The sun won't go to sleep
And so won't I
It's already dawn
All I can hear is the madman's laugh
It's bursting out of me
'Cause the grasshopper took a flight...
:icondaghrgenzeen:
AUTHOR'S COMMENTS:
:bulletgreen: June 18, 2012
:bulletgreen: Irregular rhymings intended.
:bulletgreen: Inspired by Слот -Cумерки [SLoT - Sumerki]
:bulletgreen: It's not easy to fall asleep when the sun won't go down at all...




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*Mina7 Aug 6, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
wow, i think your poem is very well written (as far as i can tell, I'm not a native-english-speaker) and i really like image of the grasshopper. I can relate to it very well and i think it works perfectly and describes the feelings in such a situation very good =)
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=Daghrgenzeen Aug 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. :hug:
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